Sprung

Day 4: A triolet is an eight-line poem. All the lines are in iambic tetramenter (for a total of eight syllables per line), and the first, fourth, and seventh lines are identical, as are the second and final lines. This means that the poem begins and ends with the same couplet. Beyond this, there is a tight rhyme scheme (helped along by the repetition of lines) — ABaAabAB.

Ooh, I do love the challenge of writing to a tight structure, but I've played around with the last couplet a little.  


Winter is at last behind us
And wakeful spring once more is sprung,
In warming gardens you can find us
Now winter is at last behind us.
Our aching backs too soon remind us
That sadly we're no longer young
Our winter looms before, not behind us
Our springs no longer tightly sprung.


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